Ben Meyers’ rating: 4.0|5.0 Starsìììì
Here’s the Plan—18 to 19 minute short film—has a sweet storyline that runs true to life. The timing on its storyline needs to be readjusted so that the story focuses on the plan rather than earning money to buy a new oven. It needs to re-focus on the original plan and lengthen its ending to increase effectiveness. The closing scenes are sweetly done.
Storyline
A couple have a dream of running a bakery. When their oven breaks and they must seek employment elsewhere, their relationship begins to drift apart.
Additional Thanks
Thank you to Director Fernanda Frick for directing effort. Thank you to Producer Fernanda Frick for making the film possible. Thank you to Chile’s Consejo Nacional de la Cultura y Las Artes. Thank you to Fernanda Frick Studio.
Buy a ticket? Yes? No? Maybe?
Maybe.
The short film needs professional cutting and editing to increase effectiveness.
The ‘working for someone else’ scenes need collapse, perhaps using a quick
montage, to allow an expeditious return to the original dream of running a
bakery. This small adjustment could cut 8 minutes out of the movie and increase
its impact. The film has a wonderful message that needs to find its place
through keeping it simple and short.
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